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Thursday, January 18th, 2007

Had the final feedback session with reader number two for The Last Track, and it left me supercharged, ready to tackle the edits. Amazing how subtle suggestions can alter a passage so profoundly, yet even more incredible is the impact of hearing feedback with an open mind. It’s taken nearly four years to develop a listening style that works. Luck played a part; I drew a great team of readers. As much as they added to the manuscript–and in sum the contributions are enormous–I gained a lot personally, too.

Don’t know if any of The Eight or the Final Three might comment on this point, but I hope I made you feel heard; I certainly heard you. Bottom line: you all made me a better writer. For this I am indebted.

Honestly, it’s about time more people discovered how skilled this crew is.

And I’m working on it.

Looking back

Wednesday, January 17th, 2007

A little more than two weeks into the New Year I reviewed my resolutions to determine whether I was moving towards a stated goal, away from it, or treading water.
To recap, the 2007 writing goals and progress notes:

1) Enter twenty(20) fiction writing contests that pay cash prizes in excess of $300 and publication in a respected periodical, annual or magazine.

As a result of mentioning this goal, three readers suggested a new competition sponsored by Simon and Schuster. The final deadline is March 15, 2007. I have decided to enter The Confession. It’s an Internet only contest, and everyone who has an opinion and access to a computer can weigh in and vote on the first chapter. Their votes, along with the panelist selections, decide who advances to round two and three.
2) Pitch the novel to 40 agents/editors.

Nothing concrete happened towards that end, as I’m still implementing feedback from the Final Three. Until the revisions are done, I won’t query. My drop dead date for revisions are February 13, 2007. That leaves 46 weeks for querying agents–sufficient time.

3) Launch guerrilla marketing campaign for the novel. The details of this plan must remain unde wraps because it’s the only truly original idea I’ve ever had about hawking fiction. If it works, I’ll gladly disclose the details.

Can’t say anything about this at present.

4) Finish a draft of The Confession before beginning another large writing project.

Besides the site and some light edits on The Last Track, I direct my writing efforts at The Confession. Entering First Chapters forces its completion, which logically keeps me on course with this goal.

Old Mr. Brightside

Sunday, January 14th, 2007

Started an entry earlier this weekend, and though I liked the writing, it read preachy, so I filed the snippet away. Maybe similar ideas will assume a new form, and a warmer tone, should I revisit them again. Which led me to the question of what exactly happens to a discarded passage. For some reason, in the last four years I never considered alternatives to my approach, which I will explain further below. Having spent a few moments thinking, I recognize I could manage surgical extractions—the outright deletion of material—very differently.

When a sentence or paragraph falls short, I know of three choices. Fix by editing, relocate the tract to where it might work more effectively, or damn the lot to file thirteen. Generally speaking, I have done very well with the right sentence, wrong paragraph theory. Narrative drops out on the page like jigsaw pieces dumped upon the family room floor at Grandma’s house. The trick is snapping like pieces together in a good enough place until the puzzle takes shape, and accept that the most sound arrangement might not happen by accident or after the first, second or third pass. Fair enough. And most who have written fiction for fun or profit understand the importance of blunt force edits: working a page over and over and over, only to change a minor point of punctuation or a single word.

But what of file thirteen, this recycle bin in the sky? I have no compunctions tossing a bit to the wind once it becomes clear it does not benefit the story. Sometimes a sentence is stranded in a manuscript, a little island unto itself. It might be a great line, but to leave it in place weakens its neighbors. Therefore, in such circumstances, it has to die.

Or maybe not.

From the beginning, I have cut with impunity, and no regard of how a stricken line might just be the right sentence in the wrong manuscript. Whoa. Talk about a paradigm shift. Cut a lot of chaff in the last four years, trying to find some wheat. The deletions were done for the right reason, but maybe, just maybe I could have saved those offending lines in another file.

See, it’s the simplest lessons that hit me the hardest.

Reader two

Friday, January 12th, 2007

Met with reader two, covered about two-thirds of the novel, and scheduled a follow up session for Tuesday. Since the task remains open, it’s inappropriate to focus on specifics–don’t want to taint the discussions–other than to mention their razor sharp editing prowess. I can speak in more general terms, though.

Throughout the life of this project, the material attracted a great cadre of voices with very definite ideas for improving the story. And by and large, each individual concentrated on different elements: characters, plot, technical details, narrative flow–and that’s just a partial list of pieces a story needs to work.

Reader feedback has been invaluable in making the novel work. When a sentence lacks coherence or a scene falls flat and three people mention the same concern, it’s a problem that needs attention. I submit that a group focused on a common focal point generates synergy, even when members express their opinions completely unaware of other viewpoints. Synergy makes the manuscript better. The more I yield to forces greater than myself, the more solid the final results.

Hitting a similar place on my own with the manuscript would have taken two to three times longer, and meant a lot more frustration. Even if I did recognize the foibles and work through them, picking off one gremlin at a time, The Last Track would be very different right now.

And now I’m really itching to find it a home.

Confessions of a Saint – Part II

Wednesday, January 10th, 2007

…Continued from yesterday.

Finding someone in the Internet age is easy work, provided they have a fixed address, cellphone, or an email account. Couple of minutes on Google, a coherent query, and viola, out pops suggested locations. Maybe not a specific street address, but good enough. Maybe a list of hobbies, a past or current employer, or a blog with a contact form. Well, chalk Bob Simmons down for none of the above. Even the most exclusive country clubs scrimp on email services for caddies, and guys running card games in the basement generally avoid publicity. The hotel he lived at shuttered five years ago. No, the Internet was worthless tool here.

His entire family disowned him; Relatives would be no help.

To find Bob meant going straight to the source–back to Red Bank. Which led to the first, and most basic problem.

Scenes change. In ten years, speculators transformed Red Bank from an up and coming burgh to a slick hub for very wealthy professionals. In some circles, Red Bank is “Little Wall Street”. Brokerage firms line Broad Street, crowding out less upscale merchants. Specialty shops offer kitsch goodies to the sort of clients who don’t carry cash or credit cards, because clerks–and everyone else–knows their names. Rows of Victorian and frame homes, once rundown and in shambles, now are remodeled, and fetch big money. Gone are the days two twenty-somethings could rent a house or apartment on service jobs, and the occasional drug deal.

Yet the more I toured the old haunts, what few remained, the more I realized the gentrification of Red Bank was not the true dilemma. The source ran deeper: I scarcely knew anyone in town. My contacts long moved on to their first or second homes. One went to jail. Another haunted a psychiatric facility for awhile, before he tore off for California.

So I knew no one who could help. Well, almost no one.

I did know Jorge*. Jorge introduced me to Bob in the first place, and our last encounter he stuffed a phone number into my mailbox when I wasn’t looking. Calling Jorge might work. I wasn’t crazy about dealing with Jorge face to face, because while likable, he tried to move in with anyone who talked to him for more than five minutes. Any chance to get off his parent’s couch, was a chance he was willing to take. And he pursued these opportunities without exception. He even pursued opportunities that were never implied.

Once he ventured as far as the Deep South on an invitation for dinner provided he was already in town. A month later, the friend realized Jorge planned to stay indefinitely and kicked him to the curb. Jorge spent another month sleeping in the backseat of a rotting Datsun in view of the front door, before caving and driving back to the mother land. Some might call that sort of man a mooch. All right by Jorge. He was impervious to labels. Or insults, for that matter.

But no one knew Bob better than Jorge. I decided to call and take my chances.

I dialed. A man answered, and not Jorge. This voice was worn from fifty years of Pall Mall’s. After I made it clear that Jorge didn’t owe me money and I wasn’t fishing for a Brokeback moment with his son, Mr. Diaz gave me an address.

Fifteen minutes later, I arrived.

It was an abandoned church.

I knocked on the door. It creaked open slowly.

To be continued…

* Jorge is not his real name.

Confessions of a Saint – Part I

Tuesday, January 9th, 2007

In the mid ’90s a magazine declared Red Bank, New Jersey the hippest town in the state. Bold as that assessment might sound to those from other counties, it was true at the time. At least for me.

Met The Wife in Red Bank in that period. It was a million to one chance, which I very nearly squandered. Fortunately, I reversed course and secured a date. For political reasons–her very, very large boyfriend–we labeled it a black and white photo discussion over coffee and sandwiches.

Kevin Smith set up a production company on Broad Street, long before he dreamed of Hollywood Hills. There were gourmet coffee shops, restaurants, antiques, and musicians on every corner. Bruce Springsteen shopped in town. Red Bank had a vibe and media blessings; good tidings buzzed all around us. And a poet, Bob Simmons* appeared at odd moments on a bicycle.

He lived in Sea Bright, a summer town on the shore, and rode to Red Bank after work most nights on a rusty Schwinn with a notebook in his back pocket.

By profession, Bob caddied at an exclusive golf course, then gambled the earnings through the winter. When he needed extra cash, he got hit by cars. He was the master of the 5,000 dollar settlement. Several of the cases might have generated big cash awards and landed him on easy street, but Bob didn’t get hit to get rich. He got hit because he rode his bicycle poorly when drunk, and not much better sober. The way he figured it, his needs were humble, and money corrupted a man. Bob hated corruption.

When the settlements paid out, Bob shared the winnings. Free dinners, smokes and whiskey for his crew. He was generous like that, and we all paid him in kind when he was down on his luck. He was loved. I spotted Bob cigarettes and cheeseburgers like the rest of the guys.

He had an awful lot of talent, especially when it came to writing. Every so often, usually after a night on the town, out came that notebook and Bob unleashed some verse. Normally, I don’t care much for poetry, it’s too steeped in meter and meaning for my working class tastes, but Bob had a way with the pen and page.

This year, I’ll be the same age as Bob Simmons back in the glory days, and I decided to find him.

To be continued…

* Bob Simmons is not his real name.

Things have changed

Monday, January 8th, 2007

Copy protecting a manuscript the official way via the Copyright Office can take upwards of six months. Registering the Ridge Runner, the precursor to the novel, took five, for instance. Add in the cost, which is $45 USD, and usually I opt for the poor man route. It’s faster, cheaper, and less onerous to seal up a short story and mail the package to myself before showing it around. Given the amount of time invested in a novel and potential financial upside, a 45 dollar tag seems more reasonable.
Lo and behold my TX certificate for The Last Track arrived in the mail today–an end to end turnaround of 8 weeks. Pretty incredible considering it necessitated heavy governmental oversight in the midst of three major holidays.

So to the Register of Copyrights, Marybeth Peters, whatever you did to streamline the process, much thanks! I’d send cookies, but that would probably land me on the wrong kind of watch lists.